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On strings, on strings,
your biting voice still rings.
How could you? Why would you?
Each echoed word still stings.

On strings, on strings.
I'm limply tugged through rings.
Each action, reaction,
made by what the wire brings.

On strings, on strings.
The strand, it sings
of better times, of better lines;
hooked along my soul, it clings.

On strings, on strings,
despite the arrows and the slings,
still I'm dragged until I'm ragged.
Blood and tears and fallacies.

On strings, on strings.
To hell they'll pull with blackened wings
while they burn in martyrs scorn
to damn my life in depth of sins.

On strings, on strings.
A web of tangles, I claw at these.
A futile effort, a fatal effect.
I free myself and fall lifeless.
©2008-2009 ~Blal
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yes, the degradation of rhyme was on purpose

its an interesting feeling isnt it?

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:iconkil-in500:
Wow. Interesting poem. And your rhyming isn't that bad. It's really kind of creepy.

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~Last breaths are like kisses
You'll never get enough~
:iconblal:
its not meant to rhyme badly, its just meant to break the rhyme scheme as it gets closer to the end, i wanted it to be reminiscent of breaking free of the controlling template, and i like the thought that the end of the poem is frayed is similar to the end of a piece of rope lol

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:iconblal:
you sure? lol, you dont seem too convincing

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:iconwhisperingyoko:
i was still searching for a word to describe your poem :D

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zomg its me
piccies
:iconblal:
lol, alright ^_^ thanks

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:iconcrazy4music14:
I like it. Especially after reading your comment on it about it fraying like a rope. You should submit it to the BPR. ^_^
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i might do that :3, whats the topic this year?

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